给文章修改,提点意见(300字英文)It the widely using of robots will bring our human beings danger,use your own view and thoughts on it:a blessing or a curse?The issue of whether or not widely using of robots has a positive influence to socie

给文章修改,提点意见(300字英文)It the widely using of robots will bring our human beings danger,use your own view and thoughts on it:a blessing or a curse?The issue of whether or not widely using of robots has a positive influence to socie
给文章修改,提点意见(300字英文)
It the widely using of robots will bring our human beings danger,use your own view and thoughts on it:a blessing or a curse?
The issue of whether or not widely using of robots has a positive influence to society has been hotly disputed in public.Some people contend that robots bring plenty of benefit for society,making our life more convenient and effective; quite a few experts,however,believe that over depending on robots will jeopardize society in some aspects,such as unemployment and losing some basic skills.The purpose of this essay is to evaluate both sides of controversy and present my own view about this phenomenon.
The advocates of widely using of robots hold a strange belief that a large amount of advantages will be contributed by the advanced robots technology.To be specific,productivity will be improved in the factory if they use robots instead of workers.This is because robots can handle every difficult procedure,making the product more accurate.Therefore,it will increase the profit for factory and provide a positive predominance in the market.Moreover,some danger works,like porters and chemical workers,can be replaced by robots,which strengthen the security rate.Hence,it can be concluded that robots provide a lot of advantages for the society.
Some social experts,particularly those who work in the employment department,argued that widely using of robots bring a wealth of negative effects for society,such as increasing the unemployment rate,extinct traditional culture and skill.More specifically,high unemployment rate can be mainly attributed to the widely relying on the advanced robots technology.The reason is that some manual workers can be easily replaced by robots and they cannot find other jobs.Therefore,the consequence of this phenomenon leads to increasing burden of welfare state,more people are suppose to supported by government.Another issue cause by the robots is that some basic skills have disappeared rapidly,including handcraft and calculating.The fact that handcraft is one of the traditional culture,which can represent the history of country,has been underestimated in public.Therefore,citizens are supposed to protect those of useful skills in society.
To sum up,regardless of the fact that robots bring a lot of merits to society,its still make a lot of demerits,which may lead our life become more detrimental.Overall,in my own view,people are supposed to restrain to use robots in labour market.

给文章修改,提点意见(300字英文)It the widely using of robots will bring our human beings danger,use your own view and thoughts on it:a blessing or a curse?The issue of whether or not widely using of robots has a positive influence to socie
It the widely using of robots will bring our human beings danger,
【这句话不对,是想用it引导主语么?是要做陈述还是提出疑问?有三种表达,(⊙o⊙)哦,根据后面的意思,(我觉得你是想说：机器人的广泛应用会给人类带来危险么?因为使用了will)就是第三种】：
1.It is the widely use of robots that bring our human beings danger.(It is 强调)
2.Is it the widely use of robots bring our human beings danger
3.Is the widely use of robots will bring our human beings danger?
【用use就行,use有名词的意思】
use your own view and thoughts on it【on it 可以删掉】
The issue of whether or not widely using of robots has a positive influence to society has been hotly disputed in public
【whether的用法不对（建议专门看下语法书讲whether的）,应该这样说：whether the widely use of robots has a positive infuence on society（have an influence on 是固定搭配,不用to）】
bring plenty of benefit for society
【bring...to...(给/为...带来...)】
present my own view about this phenomenon.
【view on sth 】
The advocates of widely using of robots hold a strange belief
【of widely...robots删掉,支持者就可以了,读者可以看懂】
some danger works,
【dangerous 是形容词,danger是名词,work不可数名词：some dangerous work】
which strengthen the security rate
【strengthen的意思是加强,而这里说的是安全率,应该用提高：increase,raised...或是说ensure the safety of workers...】
Hence,it can be concluded that robots provide a lot of advantages for the society.
【这句话表明,The advocates 的观点是正确的,本段开头就不应该用strange来评价他们的观点 ,另外我觉得可以改成：we can get the conclude that...it can be 用的有点频繁了,多变换句式增强文章的可读性.】
negative effects for society
【effects on sth 固定搭配】
The reason is that some manual workers
【用because就可以了,这个这个,感觉你的文章.有点僵硬,模式化了,哎,写出漂亮文章的确很难啊,我也探索ing...与君共勉!】
The fact that handcraft is one of the traditional culture,which can represent the history of country,has been underestimated in public.
【我的修改是,the fact that handcraft,as one form of expression of the traditional culture,represents the history of a country,has been underestimated by public.】
its still make a lot of demerits,which may lead our life become more detrimental
【1.it still make...2.我的修改：which may threat the healthy development of our society.】
一些词:widely ,lead,suppose,view,demerit……
还有一些句式 xxx is that xxx ,the fact that ……频繁出现,就是那种这句出现了,下句马上又出现了的,这种不好,不是说不能用个第二次.
还有就是介词的使用,固定搭配什么的,应该加强一下.
有不对的地方,楼主指出来啊~