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帮忙看看这段英文自我介绍写的有没有语法问题,帮忙看看这段英文自我介绍写的有没有语法问题,这是去面试用的,需要一个简单的自我介绍,这是我自己写的,英文不好,怕有语法问题,或者提供
帮忙看看这段英文自我介绍写的有没有语法问题,
帮忙看看这段英文自我介绍写的有没有语法问题,这是去面试用的,需要一个简单的自我介绍,这是我自己写的,英文不好,怕有语法问题,或者提供一些更好的自我介绍也可以,简短一些不超过十句话,
Hello everybody,my name is ***,I am ** yearsold,I live in the Fengtai District Liujiayao,My hobby is reading,I am lively and cheerful character,honest,enthusiastic,I seriously meticulous in their work,patience,and have a good team spirit.
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帮忙看看这段英文自我介绍写的有没有语法问题,帮忙看看这段英文自我介绍写的有没有语法问题,这是去面试用的,需要一个简单的自我介绍,这是我自己写的,英文不好,怕有语法问题,或者提供
Hello everybody,my name is ***.I am ** years old.I live in the Fengtai District Liujiayao.My hobby is reading.(这里可以再加一些,否则显得比较单调）I am an outgoing(LZ,如果要表达活泼的话,outgoing比较地道）, honest and enthusiastic girl,who is serious about working.My friends often say that they feel happy to cooperate with me,because I'm pretty patient.(借助外人的客观评价看,显得比较真实）最后可以加一句名言,表现自己的理想或志向等（例如,I believe that what doesn't destroy you will only make you stronger或者I believe that if I can see it,I will be it等）
Thank you for giving me this opportunity.
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I am seriously meticulous and patient in my work. what's more I also have a good team spirit.

I live in Fengtai District...这个前面不用加the的
I have a lively and cheerful character...
后面建议说成I'm also an honest and enthusiastic boy.
meticulous是小心翼翼的意思，表示的程度一般比较重，所以只需要简单说成I work carefully wi...

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I live in Fengtai District...这个前面不用加the的
I have a lively and cheerful character...
后面建议说成I'm also an honest and enthusiastic boy.
meticulous是小心翼翼的意思，表示的程度一般比较重，所以只需要简单说成I work carefully with patience and share team spirit in the group.
大概就是这样了，不知道是否可以。

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1.I am lively and cheerful character，这个不对
要不就说I am lively 、 cheerful 、honest and enthusiastic。不然就是I have a lively 、 cheerful honest and enthusiastic character 。
2.seriously meticulous in their...

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1.I am lively and cheerful character，这个不对
要不就说I am lively 、 cheerful 、honest and enthusiastic。不然就是I have a lively 、 cheerful honest and enthusiastic character 。
2.seriously meticulous in their work, patience, and have a good team spirit.不对
可以这样：I am am responsible for my work, I am very patient in my work.With team work cooperation and strong curiosity, I am full of competition sense and innovation spirit.

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