谁能帮我检查这段英语中的错误?My body is slender.I often wear a white dress.I'm full of tobacco.I have a family.I have millions of brothers and sisters.We have high well-knownness.Almost all the people known me-----cigarette.Many people

谁能帮我检查这段英语中的错误?My body is slender.I often wear a white dress.I'm full of tobacco.I have a family.I have millions of brothers and sisters.We have high well-knownness.Almost all the people known me-----cigarette.Many people
谁能帮我检查这段英语中的错误?
My body is slender.I often wear a white dress.I'm full of tobacco.I have a family.I have millions of brothers and sisters.We have high well-knownness.Almost all the people known me-----cigarette.Many people love me very much.They can't live without me.I live in burning.The man who burned me will cut the life down with my burning.I can injure people with nicotine.You known,it's bad for people's body.Now,more and moreteens begin to love me.They often smoke.They think it can make him more handsome.But I've worked for many years.I feel tired now.I can't bear the tiring work!Everything needs rest!So you adults must ask them not to do that again.Or they will became weak sooner.从语法 词汇 逻辑 等方面检查

谁能帮我检查这段英语中的错误?My body is slender.I often wear a white dress.I'm full of tobacco.I have a family.I have millions of brothers and sisters.We have high well-knownness.Almost all the people known me-----cigarette.Many people
slender最好用slim.slender含有微弱的意思.
We have high well-knownness改成we are well-known i the world.
.Almost all the people known me.known改为know．因为是一般情况.
You known,改为you know--
bad for people's body..body改为health
They think it can make him .him改为them
Or they will became weak sooner.became 改为become.
这篇作文好像是查字典拼出来的?
不是很好.．章词什么的都用得不好.提个意见~

i have a slender body.I often wear a white dress.I'm full of tobacco. I have a family.I have millions of brothers and sisters.We have high well-knownness.Almost all the people know me-----cigarette. M...

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i have a slender body.I often wear a white dress.I'm full of tobacco. I have a family.I have millions of brothers and sisters.We have high well-knownness.Almost all the people know me-----cigarette. Many people love me very much.They can't live without me.I live in burning.The man who burns me will cut his life down with my burning.I can harm people with nicotine.You know,it's bad for people's health. Now,more and more people begin to love me.They often smoke.They think it can make him look cool.But I've been working for many years.I feel tired now.I can't bear the tiring work!Everything needs rest!So you adults must ask them who smoke not to do that again.Or they will become weak sooner.
以上是我改过的。

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