大家帮我看看这篇自我介绍怎么改改?Good morning(afternoon). I am glad to be here for this interview. First let me introduce myself. My name is XX, I am 25. I come from XX, I graduated from Hebei University of Engineering, Department of

大家帮我看看这篇自我介绍怎么改改?Good morning(afternoon). I am glad to be here for this interview. First let me introduce myself. My name is XX, I am 25. I come from XX, I graduated from Hebei University of Engineering, Department of
大家帮我看看这篇自我介绍怎么改改?
Good morning(afternoon). I am glad to be here for this interview. First let me introduce myself. My name is XX, I am 25. I come from XX, I graduated from Hebei University of Engineering, Department of Traditional Chinese Medicine in July ,2007.In the past 4 years I have been prepareing for the postgraduate examination while I (was?) An assistant at the Chinese Medicine Clinic. And During that time I passed the physician assistant certificate. Now all my hard work has got a result since I have a chance to be interview by you .
I am very enthusiastic Like to help others, and I have many hobbies to enjoy my colorful life ..i like traveling, Especially those historic cities.in the future I’d like to go to many beautiful placese ,taking pictures of the wonderful sightseeing and shareing with my friends. Reading is another of my hobbies, Especially the Masterpiece. I always have Sentiment by reading them and learned a lot..
I always believe that Success comes from hard work And the pursuit of knowledge.
if I am given a chance to study Traditional Chinese Medicine in this famous University,I will spare no effort to study and Cure more patients.
我英语语法全忘了 所以希望大家能帮忙改改 这是考研面试的自我介绍
希望英语高手能够帮忙 谢谢了!

大家帮我看看这篇自我介绍怎么改改?Good morning(afternoon). I am glad to be here for this interview. First let me introduce myself. My name is XX, I am 25. I come from XX, I graduated from Hebei University of Engineering, Department of
Good morning(afternoon).I am glad to be here for this interview.First let me introduce myself.My name is XX,I am 25.I come from XX,I have graduated from Hebei University of Engineering,Department of Traditional Chinese Medicine in July ,2007.I have been prepareing for the postgraduate examination while I was an assistant at the Chinese Medicine Clinic in the past 4 years.During that time,I passed the physician assistant certificate.Now all my hard work got a result since I have a chance to be interviewed by you .
I am very enthusiastic,like to help others,and I have many hobbies of my colorful life.I like traveling,especially to those historic cities.In the future,I’d like to go to many beautiful places ,take photos of the wonderful landscape,and share those photos with my friends.Reading is my another hobby.I like reading masterpieces which I learned a lot from them.
I believe that success comes from hard work and the pursuit of knowledge.
If I am given a chance to study Traditional Chinese Medicine in this famous University,I will spare no effort to study in order to cure more patients.
我就大概把语法改了下...要觉得不好的可以提...