英语帝进来,看看这一段有什么语法错误啊.``````Hi!everyone.Welcome to China!Welcome to my hometown my name is XXXX.I am a fourteen-year-old student from XXXXX Junior middle school .XXXX is my hometown ,of course ,I love here .Here is a

英语帝进来,看看这一段有什么语法错误啊.``````Hi!everyone.Welcome to China!Welcome to my hometown my name is XXXX.I am a fourteen-year-old student from XXXXX Junior middle school .XXXX is my hometown ,of course ,I love here .Here is a
英语帝进来,看看这一段有什么语法错误啊.``````
Hi!everyone.Welcome to China!Welcome to my hometown my name is XXXX.I am a fourteen-year-old student from XXXXX Junior middle school .XXXX is my hometown ,of course ,I love here .Here is a good place to visit .I hope you’re enjoying your stay here .Finally I think I can know more about the US in this activity.
我又重写，看看怎么样
Hi!everybody,welcome to my hometown Yuexi.My name is Cheng Liuli.Now I am fourteen from Tiantang junior high school,I am just a junior student there.
Yuexi is not only a country with a long history,but it is a good place to have a trip.I love here and I think you will also love it.I wish everybody of you will enjoy yourself and maybe you could talk to me about your lovely hometown as our friendship as return.

英语帝进来,看看这一段有什么语法错误啊.``````Hi!everyone.Welcome to China!Welcome to my hometown my name is XXXX.I am a fourteen-year-old student from XXXXX Junior middle school .XXXX is my hometown ,of course ,I love here .Here is a
是想向外国朋友介绍你自己和家乡,同时与对方交友,是吧?
语法不是你表达的关键问题,而是语气语感,正是因为太过分强调规范的用语用词,所以通篇讲述出来的感觉,都太过生硬中文化.
按照美国人的习惯,照你需要的重写这段文,千万切记.交流交流,不管哪种语言,交流的内容永远是最重要的,形式永远次之.对于母语的人,无论你如何语无伦次,对方都能根据你的身体语言神态情景关键词,猜个八九不离十,所以这就是我个人的体会.努力讲些对你对对方而言,更重要的内容,才是交流中应该重视的问题.
hi,everybody,welcome here(welcome to china.如果非得强调到‘中国’这一特殊地域,就加上吧,其实来的人都知道,何必再生硬地强调,还不如把CHINA换成当地的具体地名,更让人感兴趣)welcome to my hometown xxx(你家乡的具体地名,可以只转换成拼音即可)!this is/i'm XXX(报上你的名+姓【拼音或译名】,做个简单自我介绍,eg.now i'm fourteen fm xxx school,i'm just a junior student there.i'm pround of this place,not only because it's my hometown,but for its impressing site-seeing and long history and blabla...bla[你家乡的特点,自己挑选最想介绍的简要讲吧],等你描述完了,对方自然会体会到你家乡的美好,另外也会从你自豪的语气中,得出这个结论,所以.i love here,here is a good place to visit什么的,就分解成家乡的具体介绍融汇进你们的对话中吧,别再像初学英文似的生硬表达了,对方反而会认为你们安排的接待不够隆重,会想为什么不找个英文地道的同学过来介绍呢?那样,会和你追求的结果适得其反吧?介绍的最后,可以讲讲你对对方这次来访的美好祝愿.i wish everyone of you a nice and comfortable journey / visit.and looking forward to be your friend fm this precious opportunity,and maybe you could talk to me about your lovely hometown as our friendship gift as return.(最后一句用比较调侃轻松但立场坚定的口气,既能表达你希望进一步了解对方的愿望,又带点意外的幽默,在这种昂扬的语气下,表达出你接触对方了解对方的坚定愿望.在让对方意外的愉快表达之外,开怀的气氛最适合增进彼此的深入交流.这是实践得来的真知.)
希望,有所帮助~

It is a good place to visit
I hope you will enjoy staying here
Finally I think I will know more about the US in this activity.

没有语法错误，就是有点罗嗦

i love here 改为i love it!
Here is a good place to visit 改为It is a good place to visit
I hope you'll enjoy your trip here.

没有明显的语法错误，但是有中式英语的影子，比如Here is a good place to visit。另外就是有点罗嗦重复了，前面都说了欢迎到我家乡了，后面又说XXXX is my hometown。

学校名字中的普通名词也得大写首字母 middle==>Middle school==>School
of course前用点号结束上一句，且将of首字母大写
here不是名词，不能用作love的宾语，改为it 即 I love it. It is a good place to visit.
如楼上所说，该文还有逻辑失误。
另外，注意标点的正确使用，英文...

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学校名字中的普通名词也得大写首字母 middle==>Middle school==>School
of course前用点号结束上一句，且将of首字母大写
here不是名词，不能用作love的宾语，改为it 即 I love it. It is a good place to visit.
如楼上所说，该文还有逻辑失误。
另外，注意标点的正确使用，英文就该用英文标点，英文中没有句号，代之为点号。。。
能力有限，仅发现如上瑕疵，望采纳。

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Hi, everyone! Welcome to China! Welcome to my hometown ! my name is XXXX. I am a student from XXXXX Junior school, fourteen-year-old. XXXX is my hometown and I love here. Here is a good place for visit. I hope all of you have a great time here. Also I hope I can know more about the US in this activity.

1,Junior middle school 改为Junior high school.
2,Finally I think I can know more about the US in this activity改为 And I think I will know more about the US as well in this activity.

I love here .中here是地点副词，i love后面应该加名词或代词，名词短语等做宾语，用it代指my hometown
Here is a good place to visit 同理，这是一个强调句：it is+st\adj\adv+to do sth 强调这是一个游览的好地方
I hope you’re enjoying your stay here 这个句子...

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I love here .中here是地点副词，i love后面应该加名词或代词，名词短语等做宾语，用it代指my hometown
Here is a good place to visit 同理，这是一个强调句：it is+st\adj\adv+to do sth 强调这是一个游览的好地方
I hope you’re enjoying your stay here 这个句子应该改为i hope you will enjoy youself at there (enjoy youself是玩得开心的意思）或i hope you will enjoy staying here(enjoy+doing sth)

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It is a good place here to visit

最后一个词： in return

1.Now I am fourteenfrom Tiantang junior high school------------Now I am fourteen,and I am from Tiantang Junior High School
2.Yuexi is not only a country with a long history,but it is a good place...

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1.Now I am fourteenfrom Tiantang junior high school------------Now I am fourteen,and I am from Tiantang Junior High School
2.Yuexi is not only a country with a long history,but it is a good place to have a trip----------Yuexi is not only a country with a long history,but it is also a good place to have a trip
3.I wish everybody of you will enjoy yourself ----------I hope that you will enjoy yourself
4. maybe you could talk to me about your lovely hometown as our friendship as return.---------maybe you could talk to me about your lovely hometown in return for our friendship (绝对没问题，希望你能喜欢！)

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