Help me to check my homeworkI am not good at English,I hope everyone can help me to find some mistakes in my diary.(It is my homework.) ---------------------------I am a boundary-------------------- Thursday 1st,February Fine Our school needed some s

Help me to check my homeworkI am not good at English,I hope everyone can help me to find some mistakes in my diary.(It is my homework.) ---------------------------I am a boundary-------------------- Thursday 1st,February Fine Our school needed some s
Help me to check my homework
I am not good at English,I hope everyone can help me to find some mistakes in my diary.(It is my homework.)
---------------------------I am a boundary--------------------
Thursday 1st,February Fine
Our school needed some students to clean the playground,my teacher found me to do it.But I had a cold at that time,it may would be not easy to finish this job.
When I got up in the morning,I just knew I was late for it!My teacher was calling me,then I ran to school.I was afraid that it made my teacher angry.
I arrived in school for a moment,there were some students on the playground,they were sweeping the floor at present.My teacher found me,and she knew I had a cold,so she didn't angry.
A long time past.Although we had free time at school,and we could play sports there,I was tired because of the cold.I hoped I would be better soon.

Help me to check my homeworkI am not good at English,I hope everyone can help me to find some mistakes in my diary.(It is my homework.) ---------------------------I am a boundary-------------------- Thursday 1st,February Fine Our school needed some s
"my teacher found me to do it."中的found不如改成asked吧,因为found的意思是老师发现你在干什么,而asked有要求,命令的意思.
"it may would be not easy to finish this job."是的"may would be not"改成"might not be"就行了,may和would均为情态动词,用得重复了吧.might是may的过去式.而且否定词not应紧跟情态动词,而位于be动词前.
"my teacher was calling me."改成"my teacher called me"吧,用过去进行时的话表示什么呢?老师正在给你打电话?不太合适吧,个人意见而已,
"I arrived in school for a moment"中in改成on,毕竟学校是个小地方吧呵呵,in后接大地方,比如城市啊,国家啊什么的.另外,for改成after,表示过了不久你就到了学校,for表示动作的持续,而你这一句里的动词是arrive,是非持续性动词.
"they were sweeping the floor at present"中at present不如改成at that time,at present只能表示现在吧!
"so she didn't angry"angry是形容词,前面怎么能用助动词呢?用wasn't吧!
" play sports "中play改成do吧,play后接具体的运动,如football,basketball and so on,而sports是个抽象名词,应该用do的.
以上仅是个人意见和观点,你批判性地看吧~^-^

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Thursday 1st,February Fine
Our school needed some students to clean the playground,my teacher ASKED me to do it.But I had a cold at that time,SO it WOULD NOT be easy to finish this job...

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Thursday 1st,February Fine
Our school needed some students to clean the playground,my teacher ASKED me to do it.But I had a cold at that time,SO it WOULD NOT be easy to finish this job.
When I got up in the morning,I just knew I was late for it! My teacher was calling me,then I ran to school.I was afraid that it WOULD MAKE my teacher angry.
I arrived AT school AFTER a moment,there were some students on the playground,they were sweeping the floor at present.My teacher found me,and she knew I had a cold,so she WASN'T angry.
A long time PASSED.Although we had free time at school,and we could play sports there,I was tired because of the cold.I hoped I would be better soon.

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it may would be not easy to finish this job.
感觉有点怪怪的，我觉得应该为：so it would be not easy to finish this job
so she didn't angry.
angry是一个形容词，前面不能用didn’t，还是用wasn't吧

Our school needed some students to clean the playground,#and# my teacher #asked# me to do it.But I had a cold at that time,#so# it may not #be# easy to finish this job.
When I got up in the morni...

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Our school needed some students to clean the playground,#and# my teacher #asked# me to do it.But I had a cold at that time,#so# it may not #be# easy to finish this job.
When I got up in the morning,I #found# I was late for it! My teacher was calling me,#and# then I ran to school.I was afraid that it made my teacher angry.
I arrived #at# school,#finding that# there were some students sweeping the playground.My teacher found me,and she knew I had a cold,so she didn't #become# angry.
A long time #passed#.Although we had free time at school,and we could #do some sports# there,I was tired because of the cold.I hoped I would be better soon.

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Thursday 1st,February FINE
Our school WANTED some students to clean the playground,my teacher ASKED me to do it.But I WAS CATCHING a cold at that time,MAYBE...

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Thursday 1st,February FINE
Our school WANTED some students to clean the playground,my teacher ASKED me to do it.But I WAS CATCHING a cold at that time,MAYBE IT WOULDN'T BE A easy THING to finish this WORK.
When I got up in the morning NEXT DAY,I knew THAT I was late for it! My teacher was calling me.SO Then I HAD TO RUN to school.I was afraid that it WOULD MAKE my teacher angry.
I arrived AT school a moment LATER,there were some students on the playground,they were sweeping the floor at THAT TIME.My teacher SAW me,and she knew THAT I had a cold,so she WASN'T angry.
Although we had free time at school and we could play sports there AFTER A LONG TIME,I was tired because of the cold.I WISHED I CHOULD be better soon.

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Our school needed some students to clean the playground,my teacher asked me to do it.But I had a cold at that time,it may not be easy to finish this job.
When I got up in the morning,I just knew ...

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Our school needed some students to clean the playground,my teacher asked me to do it.But I had a cold at that time,it may not be easy to finish this job.
When I got up in the morning,I just knew I was late! My teacher was calling me,then I ran to school.I was afraid that it made my teacher angry.
I arrived in school for a moment,there were some students on the playground,they were sweeping the floor.My teacher found me,and she knew I had a cold,so she didn'tget angry.
A long time past.
Although we had free time at school,and we could play sports ,I was tired because of the cold.I hoped I would be better soon.
I've corrected it for you
good diary entry

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